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"Reason" doesn't need to be rational, think of it more as the "cause" that makes the effect. The reason is stuff like, is it the place, the action, the time, or what.

Basically there needs to be some discoverable way to stop the weirdness, or escape it, or something. A chance for a not dead-or-soulless ending.

Okay, so i'm having trouble here.

Each floor your character goes to (including the ground floor) there will be a "boss" monster, that should be avoided at all costs, and must be killed to advance further (and eventually to the end.)

I'm planning to have one of them on each floor (there will be five floors) and i'm having trouble thinking of the first two. Could you guys help? Just an idea would be fine.

Right now I have these bosses ( to make sure you don't make a copy)

A feeling, a sort of gas thing that is a feeling, but not a physical thing, its hard to explain now
A lost person, the prime example of what may happen to you.
And beezlebub, lord of flies, which means bugs, lots and lots of bugs.

Thanks guys.

^ Ooze filling up the rooms? Think roaming Gelatinous Cube.

I'm re-considering writing in the first person, because that doesn't really let your character think. Example:

I see a huge creature standing there, its skin (if I can call it that) is almost melting off its body, I gotta get out of here!

There, he saw a huge creature standing in the middle of the room. Its skin (if you could call it that) was falling of its body in a grotesque manner. "What is this thing?" He thought to himself, as he turned and ran from the beast, it then turned around, and began pursuit.

Also, what are you guys thinking about for your characters? I'm just curious.

Well, it all depends on how good you are at writing in the first person.

True, but remember, things will commonly happen that a character is unaware of.

You can always do mixed. First person for things they experience, second person for things that happen around them.

Monsters: A normal looking person. Aside from attempting to kill you and being impossible to kill that is. Something related to the characters.



Well you could add First-Person writing to say, something like:



"Damnit, run!" I told them as we attempted to escape that...thing that was Jacob's body. I ran as fast as I could, I didn't know what happened to the rest, all I knew was that Jacob was still following me. I went into a corner, so I tried to evade him through this door...
For a sudden thought that the character has, who's about to go into a certain door...


For my character ideas, well:


-Back Alley Doctor. The "just got screwed over for being too nice" kind, not the general "hey I'm just the budget-doc around here" one. Not easily traumatized by disturbing images being what he is, but probably a bit easily unhinged by anything that can't be explained by rational thought. A bit quick on his feet, considering he gets patients that tend to stir up trouble and so can't go to a hospital if you catch my drift.
-Serial Killer. Yep. Someone who utterly believes in helping others reach a better place through death (he can't at the moment on count of people not exactly lining up to off themselves). Wouldn't be affected much as he thinks this is all a test of his conviction, although being what he is, he'll be a threat (unless convinced otherwise).
-Investigator. On the trail of a lost child, he happens to stumble on something a little out of his league. Can perceive things more clearly, although maybe know what's actually looking at you could mess someone up very badly...

I call being a shota. Or at least an underage male. Because there is never a wrong time for that.

The first floor has been completely planned!

Since this will be the most normal the apartment complex will get, the monsters won't be able to do any lasting physical or mental damage, and boss is fairly easy to dodge and isn't crazy looking (i.e. No cthulu looking things here.) But it will kill you easily, remember that.

Cagey hats and a sack of rats. :3

Jimmy tickles and his magic pickles.

Two things:

1) How many floors will this have? Three? Five?

2) You could modify the color system so that purple moves to the top, and everything else shifts down, leaving red as the worst (P > B > G > Y > R > K). If you want.

1) I was planning to have five, however, I've been having writers block recently, and can't even start thinking about floor 2, and, since I promised myself to start soon, I am probably only going to have three or four depending on how I'm thinking.

2) How about we scrap purple? It doesn't seem to fit in, because red invokes a sense of danger, and purple...doesn't. Perhaps orange to go in between yellow and red, if we even want 6 classifications of health/sanity.