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>.< i would not, NOT! Be able to live in that family screw being god-like too many rules T_T Arghh
And the rules can be broken only if adhering to another rule what kind of family has the time to make a rule book with such perplexing rules T_T "Dies"

on the other hand that backstory is quite interesting, mostly the thought of an immortal who can well be immortal think so much of one tragic moment, although i'd be scarred for life if that happened to me >_> "nods" i feel for her T_T

Now I'ma Write cause reading inspired me with a great idea =3

It's clear you have well-developed characters and their world, Maxine. How fun! My only critique is that she seems to lack flaws -- or rather, her character seems to have no way to grow and develop -- which obviously that's something that goes in tandem with a plot arc for a story. If it's something you are passionate about, yeah, sure, publish it!

More of the same story I've been working:

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I have been debating whether it is day or night when the screech of metal above provides the answer. The heavy iron grate lifts away, and the flickering orange light of a candle is almost too much for me. I am grateful it is not daytime; the suddenness of the sun would be too much for my light-starved eyes after so longer down here. I squint upward but cannot see more than the faint outline of a shadow.

"It is time," an unfamiliar voice commands. A rope tumbles down.

I climb akwardly, feet digging into the soft earth for purchase. When I near the top I realize there are half a dozen people waiting. No one offers a helping hand, and I must crawl out of the hole. Were I not already prepared for this shame it would be agony. The people all wear long cloaks with deep cowls, and I wonder if I have any friends among them. Or, rather, people I once knew as friend.

"Let's go," the stranger says. He grabs my arm at the elbow and jerks me forward.

We move through the forest in silence; I do not know where we are going, nor do I inquire as to their identities. Who they are does not matter.

Their torches hiss, their footsteps whisper along the leaf-lined path, and I try to strain my sense past these trivialities. I try to hear the Song of the wood, the glorious strength of that powerful music.

I sense nothing, and that realization hits me like a physical blow. A low moan slips past my lips, and I stumble. The cloaked stranger's grip tightens, holding me up until I find my feet. I am deaf to that which I have known since birth. Back in my hole I suspected, but now it is confirmed.

These strangers are leading me toward certain death, but I am without fear. It will be a blessing. Without Song, I am nothing.

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Most Definately but, in my opinion i would wait till I'm comfortable with it in this case it's you who should be ^_^

What i'm saying is go for publishing but only when you think you should :3

But yeah, i enjoy reading your writing, Let me tell you right now :/ I hate books a-lot! i,ve only ever liked about 4 Writers and I read a decent amount, your writing on the otherhand has something most book authors don't (Not sure what it is though) but it makes reading your stories really enjoyable!

XD You liked my Death's Doors? Would you like to know that I'm trying to do a second version of it. I was going to make it a little more goth and I was going to place Talitha (who will probably receive a rename of some sort - but still be the same character) in a more real world setting. She will be a school girl and it will be set probably in year 2010 unless I think of another reason it should be before then. It's going to receive a small "goth" injection.

^_^ I LOVED her character, too. Death scares the hell out of her but she still stands up against it later and refuses to give in. She has a streak that in her that I never purposely put in her. There was one chapter, I can't recall which, that I had a different idea for but when I started writing it, her character took over and it went in a completely different direction.

@realism vs surrealism: :3 I'm glad someone likes that. I'm always afraid that it's going to put someone off. I actually call it "cartoon writing" (not the most apt name but it's how I feel it should be called) and I feel the most comfortable with it. XD I make this gorgeous setting and then I make some 'cartoon' things happen in such as like dragons playing volley ball with my characters inside of it. I love animation so it seems to seep into my writing. I still try to maintain facts: if my characters drop off a two story building they are going to at least sprain an ankle if not break it, however at the same time, they can be bounced around inside of a ball and not receive too many damages. It also creates its own sort of comedy without me trying.

^_^ I'm glad you like it. (I'm hoping this is what you meant... if you meant something else, please tell me!)


Also: : written for NaNo '06. It is placed up on my LJ in chapters. I would like to also revisit this story but I've never been able to get the feel for it. I couldn't decide on how I wanted the world to be. I could never get over this hurtle and soon became uninspired. It's not dead. I loved the character of Josiah and I loved the idea of a mute boy with the spirit of a sword talking to him. I'll come back to it one day or pull pieces from it and reconstruct something else.

^_^ @Death's Doors: Keep the other version? From the sound of it you're either afraid I'm going to throw it away (hell no) or maybe you want me to just do a rewrite of that version? But your next sentence doesn't go wtiht hat so I'm not sure what you meant here. If so, naw, I'm definitely going to do a second version - there's a lot more that I want to do with her. Don't worry. She's still going to be fighting demons and all the same stuff.

I look forward to seeing what more of her I can come up with. The problem with writing for NaNoWriMo is it's so spur of the moment and the pen has to keep moving that I don't get time to sit back and study the characters or setting that were created. It's like seeing a house built - I've got the framework for this character, but since it was a speed job... it's a pretty poor frame.

Anyways, whenever I would sit back while writing Talitha I kept feeling 'she's in the wrong setting'. I kept imagining her as some girl in a school uniform yelling at some cheerleader that's standing in front of her locker on the verge of kicking the girl's ass. Not a geek but not a prep. She just has her own style.

LOL, Stealth I feel like I've cheated you. I ended the story just before the big twist in the plot between her and Death, but sorry, I'm not going to give it up now because it's a twist in this story as well.

Because I'm going to publish it, I'm not going to be putting it up, but I will try to share the first chapters or so MAYBE.

Faolin is returning and Talitha obviously. They will have name changes. Hugh is also going to make a reappearance - but he's getting a personality make over and is actually going to be a villain in this round (I'm sorry Hugh!) Death is of course, though he's getting a small personality change as well (not much of one, but he's got a new part to play that's just going to be a LOT LOT LOT of fun for me to write).


I WILL give you this, though. It's the first page of notes I wrote for the story revisited. A lot of the elements are changed (it's my first notes! of course they are going to change) but I feel this way there's no spoilers in it and it might make you anxious to see what I'm doing with the story and the angle I'm taking it. It's just me sitting in front of my computer thinking and typing at the same time of the possible storylines. This is just the first page - there's more and some of the ideas got wilder and some are being incorporated. The same goes with a few elements just from the first page.

^_^; You can see what I almost did to poor Hugh. He will forever hate me for that, I think. Haha.

[spoiler]Death’s Doors
P. M. Fischer

Notes:

MC is a teen who is normal until her sixteenth birthday. She’s talking on a cellphone one night walking down the street when she comes up on someone being murdered. The person runs, scared off, but she is left there with the dieing person. As they are lieing there bleeding, her calling the ambulance, she looks up and finds a door. A big red door.

She stands up and steps back, frightened out of her wits. She turns and looks around and realizes there are doors all around her just the same as that one. When one starts to crack open, she takes off running. She soon realizes she’s also being chased by a dog. When she runs into a dead end, she whirls around and finds a boy her age down at the end of a corridor. The boy approaches her, grabs her throat, and then she blanks out.

She wakes up the next day in her room, as if nothing ever happened. She goes back to her daily life. However, things seem really out of sync, like she can’t seem to think straight. She tries to concentrate but it’s a really horrid day.

A chill goes up her spine when she’s in the middle of a crowd and catches sight of the boy staring at her. Anxious to get across the street, she makes a mad dash across the street, but she gets hit by a car.

OR

She is accosted by Hugh (vampire-like /- a ghost possessing another‘s body). Problem: What does he want with her? Maybe he thinks taking her life energy will give him her powers? / If he is a ghost possessing people then he wants to “kill” her and take over her body. PROBLEM SOVLED.

Trying to get away from him, she runs out into the street and gets hit and is hurt badly. That night while in the hospital, the boy visits her. Says they need to escape, but she has a broken leg. He drags her out of bed and pulls her down the hall around a corner. Puts a hand over her mouth to shut her up -

[this is turning into a vampire vs. werewolf thing, isn’t it? Ick! Boy is the Hell Dog, granted, but be careful to stay away from typical werewolf illusions. Hugh is not a vampire - he is seeking immortality - go back to original concept of Hugh as a ghost possessing another‘s body.]

They look around the corner and she sees Hugh entering her room but finding she’s not there. He steps out and walks down the hall - in the other direction, thankfully.

OR
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^_^ Thanks for this conversation, Stealth. I really do enjoy chatting about my stories. No one hardly ever listens when I rant about them so this is a rare occasion and you've no idea how thrilled it has made me.

I love writing so much. It's just a chance for me to let my thoughts fly. It's just a lot of fun for me. Even if the ideas turn out disastrous I still had fun with a horrid idea XD if that makes any sense at all.

I often wonder how others who don't write can live. o_O; I see a person standing on the corner of a street and I wonder about his background and suddenly before I know it I've constructed some weird story for this person. But it just burns a hole inside of me until I grab a sheet of paper or my computer and start writing it down, haha.

Anyways ^_^ I just wanted to thank you again for letting me rant about my stories like this and for you to actually listen!

I hope you like The Broken as well. Maybe you can re-inspire me for that - though I think a part of me has given up hope on it. I hope you like my future writings as well.